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Darkshade Forum / Captain Obnoxious Defender / Origin - Part 1
Posted by: Diddly, January 24, 2011, 5:13pm
Posted by: Shabadu_SMH, January 25, 2011, 12:54pm; Reply: 1
Hey, did you model GOONAD after me? I mean I DO fear the same people and "worship" very similar people as well...
Posted by: Diddly, January 25, 2011, 2:23pm; Reply: 2
Sorry, it's the Earthies that fear and worship those people, according to what the GOONAD know about the planet. I know, it's not quite clear. I had to juggle the original wording because of font size (although I've since learned how to fix that).
Posted by: Hawkeye, January 25, 2011, 3:05pm; Reply: 3
Probably should have said, Drawn to Earth by... instead of Drawn by.. The latter makes it sound like Goonad was a picture drawn by transmissions. Just a thought.
Posted by: Diddly, January 25, 2011, 3:45pm; Reply: 4
I'd rather say "Attracted by transmissions from an endangered species" "Earthies!" since stating Earth twice seems redundant.
Then "Earthies worship ..." "and fear ..."
Posted by: Diddly, January 25, 2011, 4:01pm; Reply: 5
There we go. Fixed the wording to make it more clear. Thanks for the tips guys!
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